Hi Margaret,
I think the simple statements about simple things that you've made here work
really well.
One thought I'm puzzling over is: why weep over "those bones"? I found I was
giving myself confusing answers i.e. maybe they're bones that had been
buried and the dog owner dug up later, maybe they're the bones of some
creature the dog had killed, maybe the word "those" is important - and it
isn't "these" bones... etc. But it might just be me who doesn't understand
dogs too well. I lived with 2 cats for quite a few years - but I've never
had a friend, never mind a close live with friend, who was a dog.
The title is really effective, really good.
Bob
>From: "M. A. Griffiths" <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: New sub: Throwaway Lines
>Date: Sat, 16 Sep 2006 22:58:26 +0100
>
>Throwaway Lines
>
>I'll lose some things I do not need:
>that tag, these toys, this plaited lead.
>
>I'll ditch some things I cannot use:
>that dish, those cans, these rawhide chews.
>
>I'll dump some things that make me weep:
>those bones, this basket full of sleep--
>
>and I'd bin this ache inside my chest
>if I could bag it with the rest.
>
>
> (M. A Griffiths)
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