Hi Calaya,
Sorry it's taken me so long to reply!
Thanks for the suggestions and comments.
I've been tinkering with the last line a fair bit - that "of" is really
clumsy.
It's possible that I'll have, "before my mug's half-empty they get sung"
Bob
>From: calaya <[log in to unmask]>
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>Subject: Re: When Not Having A Guitar...
>Date: Thu, 24 Aug 2006 10:09:43 -0700
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>HI, Bob,
>
>I agree with Sally...the Blues really read through.
>
>I'd a nit or two on the first few reads,
>
>but this morning I only want to ask,
>
>"Would you consider giving up the "of" in the last line?
>
>My fav bit: "here is still elsewhere"
>
>thanks,
>
>calaya
>
>~~~~~~~~~ Bob wrote: When Not Having A Guitar To Play The Blues It
>might be thought when I walk the streets I’m a citizen. I’m even mumbled
>to in Czech. But even though I stroll quickly, have a casual knowledge of
>currency, choosing coins by touch, and seeing when the adverts on the
>Metro have changed, here is still elsewhere. I’m aware of swearwords,
>bus-stops, local pubs no-one here will know. And when the washing up’s
>done, my coffee’s cooling, I close my eyes, hear rhythms that need lyrics
>and in moments no-one’s aware of they get sung. Bob Cooper
>
>
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