Thank you for your insight bob. I meant a play on pain and window pane. I
also was thinking of the animals made by fingers as shadow puppets.
kol tuv, Ryfkah
In a message dated 08/04/2006 1:03:00 PM, [log in to unmask] writes:
<< Hi Ryfkah,
This intruiges me!
All the images are of rapid movement and noise - yet, at the end, I find
myself aware of stillness!
I find the word "animals" a bit vague. And the two words "through pane" feel
odd. I feel as if I want more words: panes of glass, each pane, or something
like. (It might be that you're punning: pane = pain, but I'd still find it
awkward if you were.)
Bob >>
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