Thanks so much Christina, This works really well and I like it very much 
this way. It just goes to show that the way a poem is set out on the page 
can alter the effect it has on the reader. It is much clearer. The shape of 
the poem if you look at it from the side is like a heart beat as it appears 
on a monitor. Well to me it does but this may be carry things too far. 
However maybe poems that are written from the heart have a life of their 
own. Best wishes Sally


>From: Christina Fletcher <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: new sub Brass band music in the park (Sally),
>Date: Wed, 14 Jun 2006 11:24:03 EDT
>
>
>I don't know whether this will come through to you as it came through to me
>but if it has you'll be able to see just how well your original works.
>Interesting that you mention you were almost crying when you wrote the poem
>because the heat, the images, the sound and the emotion really come across 
>so I
>think it's great that you wrote it when you did because it must have been 
>the
>right time to do so.
>bw
>c
>
>Thanks  Christina, This is the first time that I have experimented with 
>this
>type  of thing and agree the words could be organised better. And yes the
>title  does seem a little heavy, will think about another one.  Best wishes
>Sally J
>
>
>
> >
> >Brass  band music in the  park
> >
> >June and  hot
> >and
> >music
> >floating
> >in the  air
> >dancing
> >like
> >a  butterfly
> >among the   flowers.
> >You in spirit,
> >connecting
> >with me
> >your  voice
> >singing
> >from
> >the euphonium
> >to remind  me
> >that
> >there is
> >no  measure of  time,
> >nothing,
> >that can
> >ever
> >erase
> >the  memories
> >of the  love
> >you had for   me.
> >
> >
> >
> >
> >Sally  James
> >
>
>
>