Hi Gary,
H'm - I seem to have slipped into a style that uses "connectors" at the
start of so many lines!
I guess I probably see a line of poetry as starting with the quiet
perparatory words and using the loudest words at the end. But I accept that
if every line works to that formula then the whole piece can look clumsy.
Ah, we never stop relearning how to write!
And with all the chatter I'm getting I've got interesting things I want to
try to do with this.
Bob
>From: Gary Blankenship <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: Taking Each Line For A Walk...
>Date: Mon, 5 Jun 2006 15:57:46 -0700
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>Bob, consider different line breaks so connectors do not start so many
>lines
>
>I open the door of a word
>and walk down the path of what I'm saying.
>I hear each step, feel the gravel,
>reach the crisp pavement then stroll
>to go where I'm going. Walking is noisy
>and this is the way I go from where I began
>to where I'll end up. I don't think
>where my feet will fall or, if I pause,
>where I'll stand. I just keep moving.
>I don't linger, as you are doing now
>to think is this what happens in a poem.
>When I get there I will reach another door.
>Though solid it's not a full stop. It can open.
>Inside there'll be more doors, noisy corridors,
>perhaps silence. It's where I want to be.
>
>and I agree about the poem line comment made earlier.
>
>Smiles.
>
>Gary
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