Hi Gill,
Congratulations on the book - I'll look forward to reading it. Is there a
title yet?
I loved the process of putting a pamphlet together, and found it made me
think about my poems and how they relate to one another in a totally
different way. And, connected to that, I think it's made me a much more
patient writer.
But again, congratulations, and I make sure you enjoy the rest of the
publication process and the launch.
Best wishes,
Matt
>From: Bob Cooper <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Congrats to Gill!!
>Date: Sun, 4 Jun 2006 17:18:26 +0000
>
>Hi Gill,
>Congratulations on the book!
>Somewhere in the compressed clutter of what shouldn't be on the floor but
>back on my bookshelves I feel sure I have a happenstance pamphlet. I can't
>recall whose, but I have the impression it looked and felt OK to hold.
>I think that's one of the great pleasures of a collection of one's own, how
>it feels to hold. I mean it's other people, and more people who might never
>meet than we might know, who read the inside (and you've read that, albeit
>in bits and in prototype form, almost beyond the point of tedium already.
>But the initial smell of the thing, the touch of the thing, the feel of the
>thing when it's so fresh in the fingers... maybe those are the pleasures
>only the writer knows.
>Do, please, post the details when it's available!
>Bob
>
>>From: Gill McEvoy <[log in to unmask]>
>>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>>To: [log in to unmask]
>>Subject: Re: New Sub Little Deer
>>Date: Sun, 4 Jun 2006 13:25:09 +0100
>>
>>dear Sally, I realise that in your circumstances your pc must be a very
>>valuable link for you. The reason I've been "missing" for so long -may I
>>tell you, because it is very exciting - is that my first pamphlet of
>>poetry is being published this year (July, in fact) by Happenstance. I've
>>had to work hard at proof reading and making various changes but it has
>>been a wonderful experience! Even if it were not my book, it has been
>>fascinating to see how a book comes together, it's quite a task!
>>do hope you keep well, sincerely,
>>Gill
>>----- Original Message ----- From: "Sally James" <[log in to unmask]>
>>To: <[log in to unmask]>
>>Sent: Sunday, June 04, 2006 12:02 PM
>>Subject: Re: New Sub Little Deer
>>
>>
>>>Thank you Gill I am not offended at all by your suggestions. In fact I
>>>have been thinking of changing the last line since Bob mentioned it and I
>>>do believe the poem is improved by your suggestions too.
>>>I am glad you have joined in. I was beginning to think that the Works was
>>>on the wane. Some poetic alliteration here. I have been on the list since
>>>John Carley established it. I think this was 2000 I am not sure.
>>>Thank you too for the kind comments you made. Some days my computer is my
>>>only links with the outside world so I am glad I can share my hobby of
>>>writing poetry with like minded people. Best wishes Sally J
>>>
>>>
>>>>From: Gill McEvoy <[log in to unmask]>
>>>>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>>>>To: [log in to unmask]
>>>>Subject: Re: New Sub Little Deer
>>>>Date: Sun, 4 Jun 2006 11:28:40 +0100
>>>>
>>>>Dear Sally, you and Bob have been holding lonely court for long enough.
>>>>I'm still "out here", reading, and now responding. I like this poem and
>>>>I think it could be made much neater and more succinct by a few small
>>>>changes, if I may suggest.
>>>>
>>>>This would be how i would lay out the poem:
>>>>
>>>>There he goes in the night, his lithe body
>>>>springing across the country road.
>>>>
>>>>His spindle legs dance him into empty fields
>>>>where trees have disappeared and dark moors beckon.
>>>>
>>>>The slim moon only a quarter shining, he leaps
>>>>into the night, following trails long gone.
>>>>
>>>>You can see I've left out all the "bambi-ish" bits Bob mentioned, and I
>>>>have changed your 'black moors' into 'dark moors' because black moors
>>>>sounds too close to 'black-a-moor'. I've also changed 'leaps into the
>>>>dark' to 'leaps into the night'.
>>>>
>>>>You're probably sitting back and saying how dare she? But truly this is
>>>>not meant to offend: I see lovely things in your poem; I often notice
>>>>you have a lyrical fluency which is to me quite beautiful ( and rare
>>>>these days!), so I offer you these comments in hopes they might be
>>>>helpful.
>>>>
>>>>And if you're reading this too, Bob, hello to you too - and now we are
>>>>three!
>>>>
>>>>sincerely,
>>>>Gill McEvoy.
>>>>
>>>>
>>>>
>>>>
>>>>----- Original Message ----- From: "Sally James" <[log in to unmask]>
>>>>To: <[log in to unmask]>
>>>>Sent: Saturday, June 03, 2006 3:19 PM
>>>>Subject: New Sub Little Deer
>>>>
>>>>
>>>>>Little Deer.
>>>>>
>>>>>There he goes in the night, his lithe body,
>>>>>hesitant at first, then springing across the country road.
>>>>>
>>>>>Too young to be out late searching for his mother,
>>>>>trying to capture her scent in the cold damp air.
>>>>>
>>>>>His spindle legs dance him into empty fields
>>>>>where trees have disappeared and black moors beckon.
>>>>>
>>>>>With the slim moon only a quarter shining, he leaps
>>>>>into the dark, tries to find trails long gone.
>>>>>
>>>>>I think of him now, nostrils quivering, ears alert,
>>>>>his wide eyes moist when he finds his mother.
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>>Sally James
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>>
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