Dear James,
Thanks for your comments. I hesitated before posting this as I'm aware it
may be too explicit about a subject that can fall into the 'yukk' category,
of the spiritual aspect to life, which we don't have to be religious to
feel. I'm not at all sure about the last stanza in particular.
Regards, Margaret
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From: "James Bell" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Saturday, January 07, 2006 1:14 PM
Subject: Re: [THE-WORKS] A View from the Hill
> Hi Grassy,
>
> Technically I cannot fault this piece and it is beautifully written. To me
> this is part of the fault that perhaps it has been too well considered and
> could do with some rough edges so that it does not verge on what I believe
> is called "inspirational" verse. As I say, beautifully done, but can't
quite
> put y finger on why it doesn't quite work for me. But that's just me.
>
>
>
> bw
> James
>
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