Thanks Gary for the time and trouble you have taken. The poem does need a 
lot of editting like you say. Thanks Sally J


>From: Gary Blankenship <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
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>Subject: Re: New Sub A boring way of life
>Date: Sat, 7 Jan 2006 14:17:35 -0800
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>Sally, thoughts
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>He comes home for his lunch (no sandwiches for him) (break at lunch
>opens the gate, walks up the path, goes in his house (and at path
>comes out 30mins later. (minutes, add -
>On the dot. Precise. Always on time. Never late. (consider these w/o caps
>and as separate lines
>Squeeky clean, in the rain, snow, sun and wind (no the and and, add , at 
>end
>wearing his shoes out, but not his car tyres
>he walks the same path, day in, day out. (S break
>Every Sunday, (except holidays),
>in all weathers, he polishes his car, (weather
>puts his umbrella up when he cleans it in the rain.
>Saturdays he takes his wife shopping. (, after Saturdays, see the same in
>next as the squeaky line
>Same time every week. Same shops.
>They go to the same place, at the same time
>for their family holiday every year.
>A week in Scarborough.
>The sun always shines.
>Their garden never has a blade of grass out of place.
>His children do no wrong. His wife cleans and polishes (break at wrong and
>in next at pin
>Their house is as shiny as a new pin, not a thing out of place.
>He has retired now and he still walks down the same road (no and and break
>at now and in next at times
>but at different times, he has a different car
>but polishes it on a Saturday now. (better yet cut both nows
>Well after forty years he reckons
>he needs a few changes in his life.  (great end
>
>P.S. He is as fit as a fiddle.
>
>Good luck
>
>Smiles.
>
>Gary
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