Hi Matt,
I've read the other comments!
And I also want to say -
I think the start with "You'll" - as opposed to "I'll" or "he'll" or 
"she'll" - feels just right to me. It helps create that feeling of 
uncertainty/hesitancy... I also like the notion that it is "You'll" and not 
simply "You" (which would make it a kind of command, make it sound too 
definate).
And the title: "Some days it's exactly like this" (with the word "exactly" 
carrying great irony because the whole piece contains so much uncertainty is 
also just right IMO.
Writes
Bob
(Who enjoys poems that echo his own "can't be arsed" moods!)

>From: Matt Merritt <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
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>Subject: New sub:
>Date: Thu, 30 Mar 2006 12:07:46 +0000
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>All comments and suggestions welcome...
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>
>First Draft
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>Some days it's exactly like this.
>
>You'll go to the window, your eye caught by a seagull, say,
>making the commute to the landfill tip,
>a black-headed, all sealing wax legs and threadbare hood,
>and you'll see that it's trying to snow. Fine, hard granules,
>like the fake stuff in Christmas TV. Already it's gathering
>against shrubs, plant pots, the patio steps. For days
>the sky has been full of it, and you're torn
>between waiting to see if it sticks
>or rushing to scrape up as much as you can.
>
>It's either that or go downstairs
>and waste the best of the morning
>raking out the ashes of a fortnight.