Hi Gill,
I liked this, especially the dragonfly image.
I've still not really made up my mind about "discover to me", but I wouldn't
get rid of it in a hurry. It's a brave poem so it might suit it.
Regards,
Matt
>From: Gill McEvoy <[log in to unmask]>
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>Subject: new post: Blind Dreams
>Date: Sun, 5 Mar 2006 14:02:20 -0000
>
>Hello everyone, plaese may I ask for some some feedback on this?
>
>Blind Dreams.
>
>Your body will be silk, I know,
>your breasts like water-lilies,
>golden centred, cupped in white
>and glistening.
>
>I will hold you; I will enter you.
>We will make a wheel of love
>like dragonflies,
>blue and bright in June.
>
>You will chart my body to me,
>discover to me all its secrets.
>You will warm the darkness
>that I live in now.
>
>The sheets are chill, the bed forlorn.
>You will not come, I know,
>but stillI I practise remembering:
>waterlilies, dragonflies.
>
>
>Gill McEvoy.
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