Hi Sally,
Thanks for the suggestions, they're useful, helpful! (H'm, I might replace
the Co-op carrier bags with Tesco carrier bags! Because the day Tesco gets
as far as Reeth is the day I don't want to see!)
I'll try and get an empty head over the next day or so and see if I can get
surprised by or excited with and engrossed by this piece again.
Bob
>From: Sally James <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: New Sub: Such Enlightening
>Date: Mon, 20 Feb 2006 17:49:08 +0000
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>Hello bob, I know Reeth slightly a lovely little place. I like the poem but
>think it needs pruning a little I have bracketed a few places and also
>uncertain about "some" should this be "a" or should it be cottages. I like
>"drunken moon" and the car "ticking in the night air" is good too. Bw Sally
>J
>
>
>>From: Bob Cooper <[log in to unmask]>
>>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>>To: [log in to unmask]
>>Subject: New Sub: Such Enlightening
>>Date: Mon, 20 Feb 2006 16:32:50 +0000
>>
>>Reeth is a small town in Swaledale, North Yorkshire. Maybe 2 pubs, maybe a
>>couple of cafes, maybe a dozen shops, and that's it. But do you need to
>>know that? Possibly not.
>>
>>All comments welcome!
>>
>>Such Enlightening
>>
>>New Year’s Eve is a town like Reeth
>>where local accents are different
>>and in some holiday cottage (Co-op) carrier bags
>>with clinking bottles,( bags of pasta,) are carried from a car
>>that ticks in the damp air, its windows gleaming
>>(with lights) from the Christmas tree on the green.
>>Footprints on the moist pavement disappear.
>>The door closes shutting out darkness for the evening
>>until at midnight so many people, unfamiliar to the place,
>>stand outside, glasses in hand, listening to the air
>>(more than to each other,) their breath rising
>>to a drunken moon whose light hides many faint stars.
>>
>>Bob Cooper
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