I liked this too, I also found one or two bumpy or awkard lines that might
not have seeemd awkward if the subject had not been so welcomely delicate.
The second line, as Bob remarked. (But years ago he learnt philiosophy?) ago
is better than since because since can be misread as "it' s years since..."
He's ready for the inevitable looss - I dont see it needs And.
I like the last line as it is.
cheers
SallyE
>>>
>>> Shirotae Cherry
>>>
>>> He doesn’t expect it to last much longer,
>>> but years since learned to be philosophical.
>>> It’s the extremes these days, he explains.
>>> Always stressful for tender specimens,
>>> weeks of drought then biblical rain.
>>>
>>> And he’s ready for the inevitable loss.
>>> Already there’s a double white cherry
>>> thriving on the daffodil-studded grass, so
>>> when it finally goes he’ll remove the roots
>>> and leave the plot fallow a while, but for now
>>> it’s a mass of fragrant white blossom.
>>>
>>> Leaving later in chill April twilight
>>> the lawn’s lightly floured with petals,
>>> or is it snow, either as wonderful as the other.
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