Hello bob, I know Reeth slightly a lovely little place. I like the poem but
think it needs pruning a little I have bracketed a few places and also
uncertain about "some" should this be "a" or should it be cottages. I like
"drunken moon" and the car "ticking in the night air" is good too. Bw Sally
J
>From: Bob Cooper <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
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>Subject: New Sub: Such Enlightening
>Date: Mon, 20 Feb 2006 16:32:50 +0000
>
>Reeth is a small town in Swaledale, North Yorkshire. Maybe 2 pubs, maybe a
>couple of cafes, maybe a dozen shops, and that's it. But do you need to
>know that? Possibly not.
>
>All comments welcome!
>
>Such Enlightening
>
>New Year’s Eve is a town like Reeth
>where local accents are different
>and in some holiday cottage (Co-op) carrier bags
>with clinking bottles,( bags of pasta,) are carried from a car
>that ticks in the damp air, its windows gleaming
>(with lights) from the Christmas tree on the green.
>Footprints on the moist pavement disappear.
>The door closes shutting out darkness for the evening
>until at midnight so many people, unfamiliar to the place,
>stand outside, glasses in hand, listening to the air
>(more than to each other,) their breath rising
>to a drunken moon whose light hides many faint stars.
>
>Bob Cooper
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