Bob, the poem is worth some work
Everywhere in the UK there are people
like us: confused when the phone rings
and then the voice just says, It's me.
How are you? And there's a pause. But it's alright.
Like with drizzle the world cleanses itself
in such forgetful, such gentle ways.
too many words and connectors, let me consider the above
Everywhere in the UK there are people
like us: confused when the phone rings
and the voice says, It's me. (italics)
How are you?
Pause!
It's alright. The world cleanses itself
in forgetful, such gentle ways.
The rest yours, but lots of ands etc there also...
Good luck.
Gary
Gary's book, A River Transformed at http://www.lulu.com/content/178110
My blog at http://garydawg.blogspot.com/
December's FireWeed at www.mindfirerenew.com.
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