I like this poem James. Perhaps if it had been my poem I would change the
order of the words but it is not and is your way of saying things and it
still works for me. A nice poem. Bw Sally J
>From: James Bell <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
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>Subject: New sub: nine line - sixty nine
>Date: Sat, 18 Feb 2006 13:52:12 +0000
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>I sem to be working in series of poems at the moment. The biggest is a nine
>line each 99 poem series of which this is no69. It's a wonderful discipline
>to try. Tell me what you think. It was writen two days after St Valentine's
>day so has that resonance within it.
>
>
>I am not reflective on flowers -
>petalwise the wind
>would blow them all away today
>
>as it swirls the river water
>on a tide change -
>you have still not visited
>
>this cold welcoming place
>where hell is a warm land
>reached by good intentions
>
>bw
>James
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