Ryfkah,
This poem might benefit if the beginning were clearer. This could be a
matter of punctuation rather than words. Until I'd read the poem a few times
I wasn't sure how the lines joined up.
My favourite part of the poem is the end, how the poem is summarised with
two lines of haiku-like brevity.
Thanks for the read.
Colin
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Sent: Monday, February 13, 2006 11:59 PM
Subject: New: Valentine
> Valentine
>
> The tug of love
> like war
> like peace
> she reaches for his heart
>
> Wisteria silhouettes in
> grape against lemon eve
> She sees doves
> snuggle in shrubs
> like lovers embraced
>
> He posts a Valentine
> omits the kiss
> His heart on card stock
> within an envelop
> she touches ruby
> roses within lace
>
> Under wisteria arbor
> she gently weeps
>
> Ryfkah 2/13/06
>
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