Yes, wishful thinking on my part, Gary! It was very warm and bright all
week, but it's turned a lot colder out today so I think spring may be a good
way off yet.
I like the trims you suggest - the only one I'm undecided about is the "so".
I remember being quite convinced about it when I wrote it, but I'm not sure
I can remember why. But Ithink what you suggest will tighten it up.
Thanks very much for your help,
Regards,
Matt
>From: Gary Blankenship <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
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>Subject: Re: New sub:
>Date: Sat, 18 Feb 2006 07:11:08 -0800
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>Matt, a few simple thoughts
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>Shirotae Cherry
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>He doesn't expect it to last much longer,
>but years since learned to be philosophical.
>It's the extremes these days, he explains. (goor start, but , v .)
>Always stressful for tender specimens,
>weeks of drought then biblical rain.
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>And he's ready for the inevitable loss. (No and
>Already there's a double white cherry
>thriving on the daffodil-studded grass, so (maybe no so, but not entirely
>sure of that...
>when it finally goes he'll remove the roots
>and leave the plot fallow a while, but for now (no and or but)
>it's a mass of fragrant white blossom.
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>Leaving later in chill April twilight
>the lawn's lightly floured with petals,
>or is it snow, either as wonderful as the other. (one as wonderful as the
>other?)
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>A good read, interesting theme.
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>A spring poem, a bit early!
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>Smiles.
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>Gary
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