I think this is a lovely poem Bob and very positive,it is good to read that
the world is alright. The only thing is that I too am not so sure about the
title. I am also not so sure about " a vast waiting room that's not for your
appointment" but otherwise for me the poem works for me and has a good clear
message, Bw Sally J
>From: Bob Cooper <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
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>Subject: new sub: Heart Trouble
>Date: Wed, 4 Jan 2006 12:55:05 +0000
>
>An early draft...
>Not sure about the title...
>Not sure about the poem!
>All comments welcome!
>
>Heart Trouble
>
>Everywhere in the UK there are people
>like us: confused when the phone rings
>and then the voice just says, It’s me.
>How are you? And there’s a pause. But it’s alright.
>Like with drizzle the world cleanses itself
>in such forgetful, such gentle ways.
>And later you start talking to a young mum
>when you hand back the toy her child’s dropped
>and she says lots of things that don’t matter
>except she’s glad to say them to someone
>who smiles. Then maybe you stumble
>into a hospital, a vast waiting room
>that’s not for your appointment and full
>where four students are playing Beethoven,
>how they concentrate, how they don’t blink,
>so focused on what they must do
>and, like me, you sit in that somewhere else
>for as long as it takes to return
>to a world where whatever happens
>is careful, makes sense, is always OK.
>
>Bob Cooper
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