Hi Sally,
Like others have mentioned, the crap phrase jars, sticks out, feels out of
place.
I like what else I find happening in the poem. There's a dry, sharp look at
myth's of the past and a questioning of the present and the future. It's
very subtle, it's neat.
Bob
>From: sally evans <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
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>Subject: New Poem: the vegetable lamb
>Date: Tue, 14 Feb 2006 02:03:26 +0000
>
>The vegetable lamb
>
>A tiny toylike lamb
>was said to grow
>on leaves and roots
>to open in a pod
>of lanolined wood
>to grow and feed
>provide white wool
>fine filigree.
>
>Geese born from barnacles
>would recognise
>this story. Others knew
>it foolish, and in time
>it ceased to interest
>even religious minds
>and dropped out
>of our mythology.
>
>But there are left
>here and there
>drawings and images -
>cotton-like plant
>a budded womb
>a lamb like those
>of sacrifice,
>haloes and blood.
>
>In our current state
>we cannot interpret,
>we do not believe
>that sort of crap
>but in our superstitious
>brains, plastic roads
>instead lead us to
>graveyards of fridges.
>
>Sally Evans
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