Hi Gill,
It's a strange one - I'd maybe normally have used "jiggling", but that might
clash a bit with "jingle". I have to admit that the jail association hadn't
occurred to me, but of course you're right.
Thank you for buying the book, and I'm glad you liked Man Overboard. That's
one of the poems I'm fondest of, because it was the first I ever had
published (and the first I posted to The Works!).
Regards
Matt
>From: Gill MCEVOY <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: new sub. Taking Possession.
>Date: Sun, 12 Feb 2006 18:13:09 -0000
>
>Thank you, Matt. I too wondered about 'joggling' and iImight remove it. And
>I've taken notice of what you and Gerald have both said: "in clink" has an
>unfortunate suggestion of 'in jail' which I hadn't realised. How exacting
>poets need to be!
>I have a copy of your "Making the most of Light", by the way, and I was
>very
>impressed with "Man Overboard". Your use of language in that is
>remarkable
>in its brevity and yet at the same time implies other meanings. Richly
>layered. I really like it.
>every good wish,
>sincerely,
>Gill
>----- Original Message -----
>From: "Matt Merritt" <[log in to unmask]>
>To: <[log in to unmask]>
>Sent: Monday, February 13, 2006 3:54 PM
>Subject: Re: new sub. Taking Possession.
>
>
> > Hi Gill,
> > No real nits to pick except the one Gerald pointed out. "Joggling" jars
>a
> > bit.
> > It's a really intriguing way to introduce the subject though, and I
>think
>it
> > all works well.
> > Regards,
> > Matt
> >
> >
> >
> >
> > >From: Gill MCEVOY <[log in to unmask]>
> > >Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
> > >To: [log in to unmask]
> > >Subject: new sub. Taking Possession.
> > >Date: Sat, 11 Feb 2006 05:04:15 -0000
> > >
> > >from Gill McEvoy.
> > >Hi everyone,
> > >I'd be very grateful for comments/suggestions on this please.
> > >
> > >Taking Possession.
> > >
> > >As if someone had been modelling bird-legs
> > >and these were the rejects
> > >
> > >a jangle of scrawny metal legs and feet
> > >is thrust in my palm. They shiver
> > >
> > >on the car seat in clank and jingle,
> > >their tangle of brass and steel joggling about.
> > >
> > >I nose into the driveway, slow, unsure;
> > >it feels like trespassing.
> > >
> > >But no-one comes with shotgun;
> > >no passers-by, suspicion in their eyes.
> > >
> > >I'm alone on the doorstep
> > >
> > >sorting through the bunch, key after key,
> > >until one at last slides in
> > >
> > >and with slow grind and turn
> > >unlocks the future that lurks inside.
> > >
> > >
> > >Gill McEvoy.
> > >
> >
> >
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