Thank you Colin I am glad you like it. It was one of those poems that almost
write itself. I think you are right about the word changes. The worming of
the dog is a bit tongue in cheek and goes with the letting go of old loves,
a clearing out of the system Hmm a bit incongruosu like you say. I usually
do worm my dogs this time of the year. Thanks Sally J
>From: Colin Dewar <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: New Sub February/Sally J
>Date: Sat, 4 Feb 2006 15:30:27 -0000
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>Sally J,
>
>This is a fine poem IMO and doesn't need much modification. I'd break the
>first sentence or rearrange the line lengths if I were you. There are too
>many surprises (even second time round) in those first four lines. Even
>replacing "of " (W1/L3) with "and" could work wonders. If you did that the
>"and" in the preceding line (L2)could be replaced with a comma. Over to you
>on that one.
>
>The worming of the dog is a bit incongruous among the other seasonal
>responses, but may have personal significance.
>
>I like the way the poem progresses through practical to psychological
>renewal.
>
>
>Colin
>
>
>
>
>----- Original Message ----- From: "Sally James" <[log in to unmask]>
>To: <[log in to unmask]>
>Sent: Friday, February 03, 2006 11:48 AM
>Subject: New Sub February
>
>
>>February
>>
>>This is the month of stews and soups
>>and things that go bump in the dark
>>of evenings around the TV watching
>>useless shows that do nothing for the intellect.
>>This is the month for booking holidays
>>of dreaming of sea and sand and sunsets
>>and feeling the tingle of Spring
>>creep across the meadows.
>>This is the month of looking forward
>>seeing each day getting longer,
>>tiny shoots probing the soil
>>and mending the rattling gate.
>>This is the month for worming the dog
>>washing old loves from your life
>>looking up, instead of down, cleaning
>>cobwebs from the ceiling of your mind.
>>This is the month for seeing the real you
>>shining in the newly polished mirror,
>>saying hello and casting the shadow of
>>winter from your shoulders.
>>
>>Sally James
>>
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