hi mike,

thanks for your kind words and your suggestions. yes, sudsy will need to be
changed.
m

----- Original Message -----
From: "Mike Horwood" <[log in to unmask]>
To: <[log in to unmask]>
Sent: Sunday, February 27, 2005 5:52 PM
Subject: Re: new sub: washing dishes


> Hello Michi,
              I think this is very good, many great lines and images. I
agree with whoever it was that recommended changing `sudsy´, and I wonder if
the final line overstates.


Best wishes,   Mike
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> washing dishes
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> plates, pots, never a champagne glass,
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> never a delicate china bowl. the knives
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> have lost their edge, like me.
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> she drowns tender moments
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> in the sudsy sink, counts the things
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> she never knew about love:
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> its limited attention span and
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> itchy feet, the way it howls in the attic
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> when springs come and go unnoticed.
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> around her wrinkly hands,
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> milky staleness: no more soap suds,
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> no more miniature rainbows.
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> her fingers sift through water,
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> filtering out crumbs, kernels, questions:
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> how is your husband,
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> why don't you dye it red,
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> when will you go to paris, where
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> has all that time gone anyway?
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> pulling out the drain stopper,
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> she echoes its tired plop, wonders why
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> nobody asks if she's still breathing.
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> mag05
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> michaela a. gabriel
> http://members.chello.at/michaela.a.gabriel
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