Thanks for comments Christina. Just a quick response to your suggestion
about dandelions.
I did start writing a collection of poems about Wigan mining etc. at couple
of years back but never finished  and two have just been published on
Zimmerzine, Gerald England's e line mag. If you want to see them just type
in Zimmerzine and search and Hey Presto two poems about Wigan. Best wishes
Sally J

>From: Christina Fletcher <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
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>Subject: Re: new sub Dandelion Days
>Date: Tue, 8 Feb 2005 07:00:08 EST
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>Hiya Sally,
>I think you've the material for a really lovely poem here.  Like you,  I
>think Arthur's suggestion for the last line shines.  I was a bit
>disappointed
>that you didn't mention Wigan:  Wigan's slag-heaps has a sort  of magic for
>me.
>Also wonder about 'sore' and whether sore/war is a bit  consciously poetic.
>  I
>don't know if 'dark with war' does what you want or  perhaps that's a wee
>bit
>cliched.  I like war/jar a lot and the charming  simplicity of the poem's
>spot on.
>bw
>christina
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>
>Dandelion days.
>
>Gathering posies for my mother
>by the  slag-heaps dismal glare
>I would pick some golden flowers
>which always  loitered there.
>
>On shadowed days, I took them home
>when the world  was sore with war
>glad to see my mother smile
>at dandelions in a  jar.
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