Well it's good for me Matt and brings to mind the Orkneys for me. A vivid
picture you create. Painting a picture with words but also having an added
depth with the questioning.
Just a couple of minor things in the second verse, first line should it be
"is" a mirror? and "gives" your game away? Bw Sally J
>From: Matt Merritt <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
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>Subject: New sub: The Creek
>Date: Mon, 2 May 2005 22:53:42 +0000
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>Here's my first for a long while - all comment welcome
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>The Creek
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>You expected the wide, watercolour scenes,
>disputed territories of land and sea,
>one white cloud booming across the bay
>then nothing but duck-egg blue all day,
>so a single tern strung above the shingle beach
>is at least something to watch.
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>But the salt-marsh as a mirror
>at every cut and sluice; the redshank’s shrill skedaddle
>giving your tired old game away;
>the half-hidden wrecks, the drowned bells
>the constant sarcasm of the seagulls?
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