Shalom my poetbrother,
Thank you for your honest imput.
kol tuv, Ryfkah
In a message dated 09/12/2005 11:18:31 AM, [log in to unmask]
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<< Hi Ryfkah,
I was intruiged, at the start, by the way you described the dog and the
moon! The association of tranquility and a hurricane, too, is a surprising
mix! But I felt the poem became more "normal," near the end. "candles/
incense roses/ cinnamon and lavender" don't feel, for me, to intruige as
much as the way it started led me to expect. I felt as if I wanted something
I didn't expect said near the end as well as earlier in the poem.
Bob >>
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