Well, I like the 'sing' at the end. It's a personal thing.
Andrew
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From: "Stephen Vincent" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Thursday, February 03, 2005 11:24 AM
Subject: Re: snap/ Barbour
> I like this very much, Doug. I wonder,however, if it could do without the
> "sing" at the end? Seems more a rhetorical device than functional.
> Stephen V
> Blog: http://stephenvincent.durationpress.com
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>
> > 'passion flower'
> > beyond cold night
> > opening up &
> >
> > outwarding off
> > that tangent
> > ial spread of wonder
> >
> > meant whose fingers meld
> > the notes
> > whose breath
> > scatters all the possibilities
> > heartbeating into ears
> >
> > with just the gentlest brushstroke
> > shhh sshhhh
> >
> > the petals fall
> > ing
> > sing
> >
> > Wednesday February 2 2005
> >
> > Douglas Barbour
> > Department of English
> > University of Alberta
> > Edmonton Alberta T6G 2E5 Canada
> > (780) 436 3320
> > http://www.ualberta.ca/~dbarbour/dbhome.htm
> >
> > Reserved books. Reserved land. Reserved flight.
> > And still property is theft.
> >
> > Phyllis Webb
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