Thanks, Doug. I used the word 'doodle' in respect of the (objective) time
spent on it: 5 minutes on the first draft and the same on the second.
Subjective time, in respect of the artistic process, is of course another
matter.
Stage three: I think that the opening lines should now become:
Spat-outs snigger at an untuned trumpet
And the songs that they should sing
The second line alteration is simple a minor rhythmical matter, with line 1
I feel that 'spat-outs' is a much interesting word than 'dossers'.
Best
Dave
----- Original Message -----
From: "Douglas Barbour" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Wednesday, December 28, 2005 4:29 PM
Subject: Re: Doodle
> More than just a doodle, Dave.
>
> I especially liked this image....
>
> Doug
> On 27-Dec-05, at 4:54 AM, David Bircumshaw wrote:
>
> > Boxes stack and tumble at the foot
> > Of the invisible.
> Douglas Barbour
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