Thanks for your response, Doug. & Stephen earlier. I might just fiddle further
with that one - it seems to have some substance. But at present some rhythms
are wrong and the 'decaf' couplet, while entertaining, doesn't contribute so
therefore should go. Maybe its thought will go elsewhere. Do any of you do
that? Take out a phrase and find it crops up in a later poem? I had a phrase -
'everything has/the mark of something else/on it' in a botched poem when I
was in my twenties. In my forties it came back in a poem. Very eerie. Perhaps
decaf will return.
Andrew
Quoting Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]>:
> barding for sure, Andrew. or bardling.
>
> Although we are having, for this week at least, something of a
> Spring-like time, with the temp yesterday +19, Winter is on the way, &
> the kids on our block are too young or off to school; no such sights as
> these.
>
> Doug
> On 22-Nov-05, at 7:33 PM, Andrew Burke wrote:
>
> > out early
> > watering the roses
> > before the sun burns them
> >
> > I scratch my neck
> > and dislodge a bee
> >
> > drunk already
> >
> > *
> >
> > next weekend’s
> > council pick-up
> > has grown a fair crop
> >
> > fringing the road
> > on browning verges
> >
> > of white goods
> > stained lounges
> >
> > broken bikes and office chairs
> > that won’t hold office
> > anymore
> >
> > *
> >
> > I have measured my life
> > in teaspoons of decaf
> >
> > *
> >
> > evening comes
> > and young boys
> > punch the shit out of
> > the washing machine
> >
> > which once washed their nappies
> >
> > leaving the white pedestal
> > standing
> > arse-up
> >
> > *
> >
> > all creatures have
> > Buddha-nature
> >
> > except bored boys
> >
> >
> >
> >
> >
> > (with apologies to Gary Snyder & TS Eliot)
> >
> >
> >
> > Andrew Burke
> > Bard of Bassendean
> >
> >
> Douglas Barbour
> 11655 - 72 Avenue NW
> Edmonton Ab T6G 0B9
> (780) 436 3320
>
> Shakespeare
> Drag yr mouldy old bones
> Up these stairs & tell me
> What you died of,
> I think
> I’ve got it
> Too.
>
> Sharon Thesen
>
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