> I don't see what's wrong with that final section; especially as it
> isn't necessarily what the speaker thinks but what he quotes. Is it
> weak?
[SNIP]
> Well, I dont necessarily see the need to cut that final section...
>
> Doug
I'm with Doug here -- I think 8 makes a concluding coda and melds with the
rest.
Great poem, Fred -- going to print it out and store it.
(Were the double-returns between lines deliberate? I'm assuming not.)
Robin
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