Hi Frank,
Well, there's an energy in some of the causations, for sure.
The final thing came quickly - even the 3/9 (apart from second last
line) word line thing - but I suspect it had been high on bubble for a
while. We got a real cold office, among(st) so many other things.
Olson, eh. Me typical Australian, I don't enough of him and more and
more feel I ought.
Best,
Jill
On Wednesday, August 24, 2005, at 10:17 PM, Frank Parker wrote:
> Jill, this snap illustrates a mastery of metaphor and fulfills Olson's
> " A
> poem is energy transferred from where the poet got it (he will have
> some
> several causations), by way of the poem itself to, all the way over
> to, the
> reader. . . . the poem itself must, at all points, be a high
> energy-construct and, at all points, an energy-discharge."
>
> Thanks,
> Frank
>
>
>> cold hits out
>> lashes my back
>> does its circuit
>> of the room
>>
>> we say oh
>> no more cold
>> it goes on
>> the snap shut
>>
>> get up go
>> for a walk
>> sister sun love
>> my tired back
>>
>> the long flex
>> to the ground
>> lift flaps open
>> we go then?
>>
>> all along the street are the glints and greets
>> out here you can feel the hinge of new spring
>> out here you can feel what leaves you sweet
>>
>>
>> Jill Jones
>> Surry Hills, 22 August 2005
>>
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