Thanks, Knut -- I will give this some thought. It surprised me, as I
was concerned about the *last* two lines, that they might be
over-the-top.
It's always helpful to hear another perspective.
On 11/16/05, Knut Mork Skagen <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Dear SB,
>
> Very moving; what share indeed. I saw photographs of the Thailand lanterns, and had a suspicion they might show up in today's snaps. But the move from tropical lanterns floating up to snow to falling stars was surprising & very effective. Doubly so because we just had the year's first snowfall today, several weeks late thanks to climate change. Yesterday I had to explain to my 5-year-old that there might be no more snow for Christmas in the foreseeable future, which of course is the least of our problems, but catastrophe becomes much more difficult to bear when you have to communicate it to your children.
>
> I wonder, though, what role the first two lines have. "Sometimes the sky / is a van Gogh sky" strikes me as a weak opener, and the first two lines in general seem to be the start of another line of thought which isn't completed by the rest of the poem.
>
> --Knut
>
> > Sometimes the sky
> > is a van Gogh sky. Once
> > I saw a dragon there.
> > Yesterday in Thailand
> > the people sent lanterns
> > up into the night sky
> > with all their sins
> > and sadness. What
> > is my share of the sins
> > of our leaders? Is there
> > a lantern for that? Tonight
> > the moon is full and the sky
> > is thick with snow; falling stars
> > for all the burning children.
> >
> > --
> > ~ SB =^..^=
> >
> > http://www.sbpoet.com
> >
>
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~ SB =^..^=
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