Judy thanks you put your finger on it -I at the moment have two versions
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Sent: 29 June 2005 11:42
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Subject: Re: snap Wednesday, 29 June 2005
wonderful, patrick! title, too. & I tend to think that last line's size
oughta stay as is (smooth w rest of pome) bcuz then the surprise is
suprise-ier. vilejudy
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From: "Patrick McManus" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Wednesday, June 29, 2005 4:20 AM
Subject: snap Wednesday, 29 June 2005
> VARNISHED
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> with skill
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> a perfectionist
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> perched high
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> he finally finished
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> after rubbing down
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> each and every coat
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> with care and love
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> his front windows
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> ready weatherproofed
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> against all elements
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> cruel snow frost
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> harsh sunlight
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> insidious rains
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> and whatever
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> all sealed
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> and so snug
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> he cleared up
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> ever professional
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> his eye fell on
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> the tin's small print
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> for interior use only.
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> pmcmanus 9am
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> raynesparkwimbledonuk
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> n658
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> ps last line should be in 8pt
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