Hi all,

Well, I've been playing around with some haiku-ish things and a new form
called hay(na)ku, which some of you would have heard of.


First, some haiku-ish stanzas (they make no claims to the exact form of any
kind):

summer is an umbrella
trailing shadow
blinding light


street smoke passes
my mouth
exhales stories


through open doors
breeze salt
welcome sting


a shawl of rain
street-brown buildings
no spare change


after the weight
of eleven dreams
the dog shadow


this morning sleepless
with birds
an old valley


absence as presence
you feel it
elegy



And some renga-like stanzas:

day-worn sweat
a brown horizon
lungs singed petals

in storm teeth
needing a place for repair


grass turns white
a year's shadow
chills morning

night clouds gather
white sleep and memory


a door bangs
dust shimmies
beyond question

cool gull wing arcs
long sky waves back



And this is in hay(na)ku form (an anthology of hay(na)ku is due out later this
year):


wet waiting arms

Hands
of the
full tide drift

mist
the river
oars long sighs

lizard
sun wall
shadow, not you

chorus
white blossom
steps of rain

notes
next door
fret down channel

waking
useless empty
kiss of morning

scuffles
in branches
magpie jealous nest

jasmine
risen fences
night cool nostalgia

forgotten
skin touch
purple night flower

tracing
the hill
draw in breath



I've found it an antidote to ways I've often written in the past. I'll see if
it goes somewhere.

Interesting to read what others are doing.

Many thanks,
Jill


> In a message dated 5/7/2005 7:00:38 PM Eastern Standard Time,
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> > After reading an article about haiku, I have attempted
> > to write some. A new thing for me.
> >
>
> Janet, what article were you reading? Is it online?
> Finnegan
>