Believe it or not, some publishers actually read the whole thing, more than
once, and tend to realise what is going on when they come to II and III etc.
Roger
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From: "Janet Jackson" <[log in to unmask]>
To: <[log in to unmask]>
Sent: Saturday, April 23, 2005 3:31 PM
Subject: 'Receive' - a work in progress
>A work in progress. Comments welcome, if you have the time and inclination.
>
> Some have said that the two sections are too different, don't work
> together,
> and I need to insert some sort of linking passage.
>
> (Note: the "I" is Roman numeral one, ie part 1 - not the word "I".
> How would one make that clear to a publisher?)
>
> Receive
> --------
>
> I
>
> Don't be ashamed.
> I too am hanging
> on these words and
> pauses,
> each a choice precise portion.
>
> Don't be ashamed:
> I too am looking
> for details,
> backgrounds,
> grace notes,
> accidents -
> each a mistake deliberately left.
>
> Don't be ashamed.
> Did you ever hug a book? I did.
> Ever lay your warm hand
> on cool printed gloss, or press
> your lips on glass? I did.
> Ever close your eyes and send? I did.
> Ever receive?
>
> Don't be ashamed.
> Did you ever dance? I did.
> But when everyone else was walking? Yes, I did that too.
> Ever cry, but couldn't
> explain? I know those tears.
> And did you make some art you thought no-one would
> understand?
> Show me.
>
> II
>
> Here is your card. Its secret
> symbol will open
> our doors. Your doors.
> Here is your ring.
> You can get a tattoo, if you wish.
> Welcome
> to the temple.
>
> Choose your screen name and password
> and join our forums.
> Read the FAQs and follow the links -
> our shared text.
> We'll link your blog now, if you wish.
> Welcome
> to the community.
>
> Janet
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