> Dribbling, Drizzling, Drivelling,   which poets are they is one a
hamster??

Tush, Patrick, you wouldn't see poor hamsters out in the open in such cruel
weather? Shame on you!

Best

Dave


----- Original Message -----
From: "Patrick Mc Manus" <[log in to unmask]>
To: <[log in to unmask]>
Sent: Wednesday, December 28, 2005 7:44 AM
Subject: Re: Doodle


> I liked this poem wish I had been there so tired of polished performances
> ---actually my trumpet was not out of tune
> Dribbling, Drizzling, Drivelling,   which poets are they is one a
hamster??
> Cheers Patrick
> Our drop had lovely decs though (when I was last there)
>
> -----Original Message-----
> From: Poetryetc provides a venue for a dialogue relating to poetry and
> poetics [mailto:[log in to unmask]] On Behalf Of David Bircumshaw
> Sent: 27 December 2005 22:05
> To: [log in to unmask]
> Subject: Re: Doodle
>
> Danke, Jools, though I doubt if any poem could easily convey the true
horror
> of the alleged carol concert that accompanied the meal for the down and
> outs: that the trumpet was out of tune in itself was miraculous (it is
very
> hard to achieve that - apparently it takes ages of dedicated non-cleaning
to
> do that) - the guitar too was off-key, but it's easier to do that with a
> stringed instrument, but the piece de resistance was one point when one of
> the two singer-instrumentalists was singing from a different songsheet to
> both his accomplice and everybody else (those who weren't sniggering
loudly
> that is)
> (btw this was NOT the concert that you and R2 almost attended the weekend
> before - now +that+ was beautiful)
>
> Best
>
> Dave
>
>
> ----- Original Message -----
> From: "Judy Prince" <[log in to unmask]>
> To: <[log in to unmask]>
> Sent: Tuesday, December 27, 2005 4:25 PM
> Subject: Re: Doodle
>
>
> > nice fixes, scribbler.  approaching a rap, m' man.
> >
> > judy
> >
> > > From: David Bircumshaw <[log in to unmask]>
> > > Date: 2005/12/27 Tue AM 10:06:11 EST
> > > To: [log in to unmask]
> > > Subject: Re: Doodle
> > >
> > > Why thank you, Frederick, Judy. I assure it was just a doodle - a five
> > > minute scribble.
> > >
> > > I've slightly revised it, if of interest. The 'EX' should be in
italics.
> > >
> > > (I'd never actually seen what a drop-in for the homeless etc is like
at
> > > Christmas before this one, just as I'd never seen what the inside of a
> > > psychiatric ward is like either. Been, um, interesting.)
> > >
> > > This is the revision:
> > >
> > >
> > >     The Triangle Drop-in Centre
> > >
> > > Dossers snigger at an untuned trumpet
> > > And the songs they should sing
> > > For this (lottery funded) EX-mas supper.
> > > Wincing the herald angels
> > >
> > > Press hands over ears. Like a brickyard
> > > Abandoned in a holiday,
> > > Boxes stack and tumble at the foot
> > > Of the invisible. Tree not there,
> > >
> > > Tree not reaching heavenheadward,
> > > As the wet snow waits,
> > >
> > > Dribbling, drizzling, drivelling,
> > >
> > > Outside, writing as it slaps your face
> > > Its true name: cold reign.
> > >
> > >
> > > December 24th 2005
> > >
> > >
> > > Best
> > >
> > > Dave
> > >
> > >
> > > ----- Original Message -----
> > > From: "Frederick Pollack" <[log in to unmask]>
> > > To: <[log in to unmask]>
> > > Sent: Tuesday, December 27, 2005 2:06 PM
> > > Subject: Re: Doodle
> > >
> > >
> > > > ----- Original Message -----
> > > > From: "David Bircumshaw" <[log in to unmask]>
> > > > To: <[log in to unmask]>
> > > > Sent: Tuesday, December 27, 2005 6:54 AM
> > > > Subject: Doodle
> > > >
> > > >
> > > >     The Triangle Drop-in Centre
> > > >
> > > > The dossers snigger at the untuned trumpet
> > > > And the songs they should sing
> > > > For this (lottery funded) Christmas supper.
> > > > Even the herald angels
> > > >
> > > > Press hands over ears. Like a brickyard
> > > > Abandoned in a rush,
> > > > Boxes stack and tumble at the foot
> > > > Of the invisible. Tree not there,
> > > >
> > > > Tree not reaching heavenheadward,
> > > > As the wet snow waits
> > > > Outside, writing as it slaps your face
> > > > Its true name: cold rain.
> > > >
> > > > Considerably more than a "doodle"!  "Boxes stack and tumble at the
> foot /
> > > Of
> > > > the invisible" - excellent!
> > >