Thanks Stephen
I'll have to think on that. It felt okay, but the temptation to that
ending might be too much should be overcome. Rhythm? I think maybe
Andrew (thanks too) was reacting to that? I certainly dont want the
merely rhetorical...
Doug
On 2-Feb-05, at 8:24 PM, Stephen Vincent wrote:
> I like this very much, Doug. I wonder,however, if it could do without
> the
> "sing" at the end? Seems more a rhetorical device than functional.
> Stephen V
> Blog: http://stephenvincent.durationpress.com
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>> 'passion flower'
>> beyond cold night
>> opening up &
>>
>> outwarding off
>> that tangent
>> ial spread of wonder
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>> meant whose fingers meld
>> the notes
>> whose breath
>> scatters all the possibilities
>> heartbeating into ears
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>> with just the gentlest brushstroke
>> shhh sshhhh
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>> the petals fall
>> ing
>> sing
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>> Wednesday February 2 2005
>>
>> Douglas Barbour
>> Department of English
>> University of Alberta
>> Edmonton Alberta T6G 2E5 Canada
>> (780) 436 3320
>> http://www.ualberta.ca/~dbarbour/dbhome.htm
>>
>> Reserved books. Reserved land. Reserved flight.
>> And still property is theft.
>>
>> Phyllis Webb
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Douglas Barbour
Department of English
University of Alberta
Edmonton Alberta T6G 2E5 Canada
(780) 436 3320
http://www.ualberta.ca/~dbarbour/dbhome.htm
Reserved books. Reserved land. Reserved flight.
And still property is theft.
Phyllis Webb
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