Hi Alison,
I find the ideas and music in this attractive.
The thought occurred that
"inverted in the back of an eye" might become "inverted in the eye back"
with possible echoes of outback (after the mention of desert), also an
inversion after "inverted" and moving the long i a syllable away from that
in tiny.
Anyway, a successful poem indeed.
best
Randolph
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