Of these the first is imperfect, partly because its foolhardy attempt to simultaneously parody sonnet form and 'These are just some of our favourite things'. Suggestions welcome.
The second, slight as it is, I think is there. Denials welcome.
Sonnet CCV
Clopoxil, modicote, nicotine and mogadon,
Brandy and coke with High H in your tea
Rough cider in the bathtub for removal of rings
(Blow Mex on the side how perfectly paranoid)
These are just some of our favourite things
Trafficking monoxide's carbon cheap suicide
Unlike our brown water we get it for free
La-de-da-de-dah-dah-dee-dah-da-de
Our conductor's redundant (a thought with no train)
Your piano's had a breakdown my banjo's unstrung
Her tuba's a toilet and all sonnets' got form
Just pull me another one these legs come with me
Tamazipan, diazapam and what's on the box
Tarzan was a spaceman oh life's on the rocks
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Eden
Short sight and long. The blessings of blur. A movement of leaves.
Someone might be there.
Best
Dave
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