Ahhh, Heather, you made ME feel guilty - just for being a hardhearted bloke.
If you took out 'in small doses', the line would be a ripper: 'Cruelty comes /
unforgiving in the sunlight' ...
But you didn't ask for suggestions, so I'll shut up.
Thanks for that ...
Andrew
Quoting Heather Taylor <[log in to unmask]>:
> Moving on
>
> Found your letter today.
> Unsaid words flood back,
> smiles forgotten, unsure again
> if the right choices were.
>
> Love is no highway
> doubt keeping us in petrol stations
> places mapped unexplored -
> arrogant you'll take me
> in the wrong direction
> even if it's the way I'd have gone myself.
>
> Cruelty comes in small doses,
> unforgiving in the sunlight,
> me leaving bombs in shiny packages as
> shadows grow your face to retirement.
>
> Moments left in envelopes fading, my name
> you scrawled on the front disappearing
> like the morning you left for the last time.
>
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