I must admit to -1 for the princess - I find that too sugary in the
context of yr poem. Down with the monarchy! Long live the Republic!
On 11/10/05, Patrick McManus <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Knut-------2-2 and still running!!perhaps it will be a matter of two
> versions
> Ps must admit (apart from being a hellish atheist :-)) also to being an anti
> monarchist but this is related to a fairytale moment !
> Thanks all
>
> -----Original Message-----
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> poetics [mailto:[log in to unmask]] On Behalf Of Knut Mork Skagen
> Sent: 10 November 2005 06:16
> To: [log in to unmask]
> Subject: Re: snapshot:::9 November 2005
>
> I'm going to weigh in for princess, which I think brings the score to
> 2-2. Having a 3-year-old in the house myself and seeing a lot of her
> friends I know "princess" is hardly a superfluous word for them. And
> taking it out leaves an awkward leap in the poem ("fanstatic hair /
> with a wispy / golden crown"?).
>
> You're not the only one who teared up over this, Patrick,
>
> --Knut
>
> On Nov 10, 2005, at 01:32, Andrew Burke wrote:
>
> > Yes, Patrick, I would drop Princess - it is so heavily implied as to be
> > superfluous when you say it.
> >
> > Just my tuppence worth -
> >
> > Andrew
> >
> > ----- Original Message -----
> > From: "Stephen Vincent" <[log in to unmask]>
> > To: <[log in to unmask]>
> > Sent: Thursday, November 10, 2005 3:56 AM
> > Subject: Re: snapshot:::9 November 2005
> >
> >
> >>>
> >>> I rather like Princess relating to crwon ?crown!
> >>>
> >> En mon avis, she is already, implicitly a princess.
> >>
> >> Stephen V
> >
>
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