This is bloody good, Ken.
I don't think you should delete the "asshole" bit, with its
touch of surreal black humour.
Writing as a specific other person - I have done it but never had
the guts to put their name on it. Yet.
One function of poetry is to express the inexpressible;
to give words to those who have none. Go for it!
Janet
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Poems at Proximity:
http://www.arach.net.au/~huxtable/janet/proximity.html
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