I suppose what made me want to cut 8 was the beautiful conclusion to 7
Roger
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From: "Robin Hamilton" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Saturday, September 03, 2005 5:59 PM
Subject: Re: "A Vision" w/ italics
>> I don't see what's wrong with that final section; especially as it
>> isn't necessarily what the speaker thinks but what he quotes. Is it
>> weak?
>
> [SNIP]
>
>> Well, I dont necessarily see the need to cut that final section...
>>
>> Doug
>
> I'm with Doug here -- I think 8 makes a concluding coda and melds with the
> rest.
>
> Great poem, Fred -- going to print it out and store it.
>
> (Were the double-returns between lines deliberate? I'm assuming not.)
>
> Robin
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