Judy thanks for commentos yes much valued -but who wrote 'straggled
bedraggled'
Greets straggled bedraggled P
Ps is that something that ladies do to gentelmen in bed ????allthose bed
ragglings
-----Original Message-----
From: Poetryetc provides a venue for a dialogue relating to poetry and
poetics [mailto:[log in to unmask]] On Behalf Of judy prince
Sent: 24 August 2005 09:33
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Subject: Re: snap~patrick
My dear PMcM,
I only wish that after the excellent strong start and middle of the poem you
had ended up stronger than your "straggled bedraggled on his page" (despite
its lovely "raggled" repeats). But, then, I'm imposing my view of you on
you---unwise to do.
OmniP aka Judy in NYC and then Ella Gant in UK
----- Original Message -----
From: "Patrick McManus"
Subject: snap~patrick
> STORMS
>
> In the
> storms
> great storms
> poetry storms
> in the seas
> vast oceans
> inside his head
> he soon realised
> had no illusions
> that it was
> just the
> and only the
> flotsam and jetsam
> that finally
> ended up
> stranded
> bedraggled
> on his page.
>
>
> pmcmanus early
> 24-Aug-05
> Raynespark-uk
> n685
>
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