Yeah, like it a lot (couldn't resist).
Maybe take away the 'lot' in the second line? 'we each have our own' ...
doesn't labour the point so much.
Andrew
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From: "SB" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Tuesday, August 23, 2005 3:00 AM
Subject: lots [poem]
this is my lot
we each have our own lot
a lot is a sheaf of wheat
from our father's field
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