Well, yes, to both of you. Though I've never written or spoken "towards," I
hear how the "s" soft-liaisons with the next sound. Thanks for the tip!
GGoose
----- Original Message -----
From: "Joanna Boulter"
> because "towards infinity" has a softer sound than "toward infinity"?
> Blurrier, more suitable in context.
>
> joanna
>
> ----- Original Message -----
> From: "Robin Hamilton" <[log in to unmask]>
> To: <[log in to unmask]>
> Sent: Monday, August 22, 2005 11:14 AM
> Subject: Re: Sea Song
>
>
>> Almost two haiku, Judy. Neat.
>>
>> I like the way the sea becomes the sky via the moist air. And the way
>> that
>> "in the moist air" (apparently) concludes the first three lines, then as
>> the
>> reader continues, means something different when it connects to the
>> fourth
>> line.
>>
>> I'd say "tumble towards", but I'm not sure why.
>>
>> Nice rhythm, too.
>>
>> Robin
>>
>> ----- Original Message -----
>> From: "judy prince" <[log in to unmask]>
>> To: <[log in to unmask]>
>> Sent: Monday, August 22, 2005 10:56 AM
>> Subject: Sea Song
>>
>>
>> Sea Song
>>
>>
>> a dark moving sea
>> echoes Daphnis and Chloe
>> in the moist air
>>
>> vacant footprints
>> tumble toward infinity
>> touching the indigo sky
>>
>> ~~~
>>
>> Judy Prince
>> 8.22.05
>>
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