Almost two haiku, Judy. Neat.
I like the way the sea becomes the sky via the moist air. And the way that
"in the moist air" (apparently) concludes the first three lines, then as the
reader continues, means something different when it connects to the fourth
line.
I'd say "tumble towards", but I'm not sure why.
Nice rhythm, too.
Robin
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From: "judy prince" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Monday, August 22, 2005 10:56 AM
Subject: Sea Song
Sea Song
a dark moving sea
echoes Daphnis and Chloe
in the moist air
vacant footprints
tumble toward infinity
touching the indigo sky
~~~
Judy Prince
8.22.05
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