Fredrick:
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I like Ken's "snap before its time." Suggest two things: one of the four
repetitions of "little man" should go; and you don't need "Crookback."
Reader knows who R3 is and his nickname; doesn't add anything.
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Well, actually, as Richard of Gloucester is only called "crookback" once (in
3HVI, but no not never in RIII, and this is a fairly integral part of Ken's
poem), I don't think is *can* go.
As to the repetition of "little man", it didn't bother me.
As Getrude Stein might have said ....
Robin
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