In Answer to your question, Judy, & with reference to this piece in
particular, Yes, more power in less backstory, & usually that's the
case, too I think...
Mind you, some very concentrated work still takes up a lot of space;
it's how the concentrate works...
Doug
On 29-Jun-05, at 3:35 PM, judy prince wrote:
> SB, thanks for newly returning me to the truncated version of
> "Bamboo" that Joanna Boulter had suggested.
>
> Again, I've a question for you and any others who'd wanna jump into
> the game: Is there more power in less "backstory" (i.e., the first
> few stanzas I chopped off)?
>
> And I can see, SB, that killing the pome's last line MIGHT
> strengthen the context, hence the entire pome. My striving's toward
> the sensual/spiritual, so it wouldn't have occurred to me to drop that
> image. And I'm weighing whether more power's in dropping the last
> line . . . .
>
> Judy
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