Thanks for the comments. I will revisit. It was one of those snaps that
poured out with little or no reflexivity as to whether things made sense -
Syllables proposing syllables and hopping along from there.
A generous gift from somewhere to myself and others as I leave for home. My
father of 93 - who had a great run - passed away this morning. And now to
family.
Stephen V
> This piece accomplishes quite a lot since it persuades its object to say
> something truthful about what it is, what it does, and who it has known.
>
> And I don't see difficulty with the second line because its last two words
> are extracted, hyphenated, set apart, as it were from the text. And by doing
> this, Stephen seems to making a gesture of presentation ("here"), as well as
> speaking of where the reader/persona has been and wehere we've all arrived.
>
> Gerald S.
>
>> Very nice, Stephen.
>>
>>> The woman who appears uncombed to shout atop a long
>>> Open balustrade of white, yellow, red and pale-apricot roses.
>>
>> I have trouble reading this part - some rhythmic problem - too many
>> stresses in the second line perhaps.
>>
>> Janet
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>> Poems at Proximity:
>> http://www.arach.net.au/~huxtable/janet/proximity.html
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