Maybe it's just me but I thought each of the lines seemed to have ben pasted
together to make a poem and didn't cling together in a continuous flow. Very
bitty for me Ryfkah.
bw
James
>From: Ryfkah * <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
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>Subject: New: One Last Night
>Date: Sun, 7 Mar 2004 19:33:13 EST
>
>One Last Night
>
>Lapis lazuli heaven
>Van Gough starry night
>
>The moon stares round
>eyed at the boy and girl
>kissing near the lily pond
>Frogs leap in shadow
>A feral cat plays hide 'n seek
>Heat lightning zig zags east
>
>The boy is off to war
>where bombs burst
>the night and boys and girls die
>
>A lone wolf wails
>
>Ryfkah 3/7/04
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